http://erikaf.learnerblogs.org/2006/10/16/snkhole-disaster/ Just another Learnerblogs.org weblog Tue, 02 Dec 2008 04:59:00 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=wordpress-mu-1.2.5 http://erikaf.learnerblogs.org/2006/10/16/snkhole-disaster/#comment-7 adrian Tue, 17 Oct 2006 13:50:40 +0000 http://erikaf.learnerblogs.org/2006/10/16/snkhole-disaster/#comment-7 Awsome story I really liked it Awsome story I really liked it

]]> http://erikaf.learnerblogs.org/2006/10/16/snkhole-disaster/#comment-6 adrian Tue, 17 Oct 2006 13:48:12 +0000 http://erikaf.learnerblogs.org/2006/10/16/snkhole-disaster/#comment-6 Erika this hook made me think about how the mood in the story changes from walking bored in the rain to "run help those kids," exciting. Also I felt like I was really reading a newspaper story, but when I got to the quotes it seemed like it was a real story. Erika this hook made me think about how the mood in the story changes from walking bored in the rain to “run help those kids,” exciting. Also I felt like I was really reading a newspaper story, but when I got to the quotes it seemed like it was a real story.

]]> http://erikaf.learnerblogs.org/2006/10/16/snkhole-disaster/#comment-5 brookemc Tue, 17 Oct 2006 13:31:32 +0000 http://erikaf.learnerblogs.org/2006/10/16/snkhole-disaster/#comment-5 i really like your story. the hook is one of the best i have seen so far. i read it and it could be a little bit longer. you should also work on the end kind of like make a better conclusion. its good and all but your smart and can do better. !&*brooke*&! i really like your story. the hook is one of the best i have seen so far. i read it and it could be a little bit longer. you should also work on the end kind of like make a better conclusion. its good and all but your smart and can do better. !&*brooke*&!

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